IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Some people think that the government should make university education free for all students, regardless of their financial situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #university #education #students #situation
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether the
government
Use synonyms
 should make tertiary
education
Use synonyms
 free for all
students
Use synonyms
. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I tend to believe that higher
education
Use synonyms
 should be free – for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea of free
university
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that many
students
Use synonyms
 cannot afford a
university
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
,
although
Linking Words
 they truly want to get degrees. Obviously, without enough financial resources, these
students
Use synonyms
 have to give up their dreams, which is unfair to them.
Besides
Linking Words
, the
government
Use synonyms
 is already wasting taxpayers’ money on projects
such
Linking Words
 as space exploration by making spaceships – the fund should be spent on
university
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
.
That is
Linking Words
 to say, the
government
Use synonyms
 would be well-advised to allocate resources in a more sensible way. A third reason for my belief is that high tuition fees may prevent some
students
Use synonyms
 from studying at
university
Use synonyms
. It is widely recognised that many young people are reluctant to face their loans after graduation, which means
such
Linking Words
 a burden might make
university
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
 less attractive. I admit that
students
Use synonyms
’ financial contributions to higher
education
Use synonyms
 help universities
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
improve their facilities. Despite that, a more reasonable
government
Use synonyms
 funds allocation can solve
this
Linking Words
 issue, for which we can find plenty of evidence from our own experience. In conclusion, I would argue that tertiary
education
Use synonyms
 should be completely funded by the
government
Use synonyms
.
Accordingly
Linking Words
, it would be generally advisable for the
government
Use synonyms
 to allocate financial resources in a more beneficial way.
Submitted by lokesh.kamatham on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: