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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather then buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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It is often argued that in some places across the globe, there is a high number of
people
 who are inclined towards living in a rented
house
 or in an apartment,
while
 others prefer to own a
house
 for themselves.
Further
,
this
 essay will be presenting an advantage and a disadvantage related to the views. Owning a
house
 save plenty of expenses. When an individual buys a home for himself, it is more of an investment and security for the future.
Additionally
, the money works for us,
instead
 of filling the pockets of tenants.
For instance
, my brother use to live in a rented apartment
while
 he studying. During that time he learned about investing and the importance of saving money. Because of ,
this
 he was able to purchase a three-bedroom apartment in a high-rise society
last
 year. Because of the uneven distribution of the job market, many
people
 leave their hometowns and move to the urban area, in hopes of having a better lifestyle and job opportunities. As. there are a lot of expenses in the city most
people
 come alone and live in rented apartments so that they could manage their expenses. In the future when family member increases, there is
this
 constant pressure of owning a
house
 which may lead to mental and physical stress.
For instance
, in a recent survey, which was done in Delhi among the youth,
although
, most of the individuals were content with their lives, they carry
this
 constant pressure in their minds that they need to save more money so that could own a
house
 in future one day.
To conclude
, more
people
 prefer living in a rented home
while
 others prefer to own one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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