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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods offood preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the evolution of technology, things become easier for humans just like
meals
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is
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 pre-prepared and
requires
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 fewer cooking procedures to be ready.
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 led some populations to think that in the future those
meals
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 will replace traditional
meals
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. In my point of view no matter how developed will the world is, and the variety
those food
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, traditional methods of cooking will still dominate people's choices of meal preparation. The young generation is a lazy generation
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 technological evolution that offers them everything without hard work and stress. Those offers include convenience fare. In developed ,countries population
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 certain reasons
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 as lack of time to cook or lack of cooking skills, or laziness usually prefer that food because it requires almost no cooking skills to make it ready to eat. Some just need a microwave to be warmed for two to five minutes and it is ready, others need just to be boiled or fried for a few minutes to be ready.
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 despite the fact that those convenience
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 save time, most people go back to traditional methods of meal preparation
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 reasons
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 as; they are informed about the consequences of that snack; enjoy the process of cooking,
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 others simply do not have money and technology to afford those foodstuffs. Others for some medical reason need to follow a diet and are forced to go back to the normal way of cooking since convenience meal has been prepared in a standard way and cannot be customised
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 every customer's diet needs. In general, the
pre-prepared
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meals
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 will gradually increase in shops but they cannot replace normal
meals
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 because of many reasons. Everyone will choose the traditional method of meal preparation.
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