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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.
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The given table indicates the preferred
TV
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 programs by the different
age
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 groups in a
european
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European
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 country in 2012.
Overall
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, each category shows various features. As for the first
age
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group
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(
age
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 11-15), the
Cartoon
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Cartoons
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 took up the biggest percentage among
whole
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TV
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 Programs category,
this
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 figure was 29%, the second
laggest
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largest
 portion was Sports, its rate was 22%,
it
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followed by Features Film that
occuped
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occupied
 18%. the Soap
Opera
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Operas
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,
TV
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 Dramas and News accounted for 17%, 8% and 6% respectively. When it comes to the second
age
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group
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(
age
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 15-20), Features Film took up 23% as the highest percentage, and
TV
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 Dramas
was
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 the least
percent
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 among the entire category. Regarding
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last
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the last
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group
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(
age
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 21-25),
in contrast
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 to the first
group
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,
Cartoon
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cartoons
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 accounted for 4%,
this
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 figure was the lowest rate.
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, the largest percentage took up
News
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the News
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program
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programs
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. In conclusion, it is interesting to note that the
prefered
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preferred
 programs of
first
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the first
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age
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group
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 and those of the second
age
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group
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was
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were
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 so much different.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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