People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increased effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this o3utweigh the negative effects?

It is evident that
advertisements
greatly influenced 21st-century human life .To me, watching
advertisements
through new technology creates many positive outcomes than negative outcomes. In the essay, I will explain
this
topic with relevant examples.
To begin
,there are many positive outcomes vested
on
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advertisement
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.
Firstly
, it helps customers to analyze which
products
are good or Which
products
are more
economic
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friendly .To illustrate
this
, recently Indian government enacted a law ,named
consumer
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protection act in which it
is
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specified that all
advertisements
should specify clear descriptions of
products
and it should be liable.
Therefore
,
people
can make a good choice of buying
product
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products
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.
Secondly
, through
an
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advertisement
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many new
products
reached even remote areas and
people
can buy any branded items in their own local market.
Thirdly
, it will
helps
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to boost industries and raw material manufacturers to develop new technology and service
among
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whole
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world.
Moreover
, it brings some negative effects on society like
people
invest
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more money
on
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buying
products
because they are attracted to the words of celebrities or famous
people
's
opinion
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opinions
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from those shows.
For example
, in America 75% of cosmetic
products
sellings are reached high during the
last
3 years because of the citizen's higher influence on
advertisement
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.
Consequently
,
higher
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rate of consumerism reduced the value
ofself
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of self
dependency and will shift society into more dependable to other economic sources.
On the other hand
, it brings more competition and misunderstanding
among
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not only
with
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the
people
but
also
with
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the
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multi-million companies. To summarize, There is a saying 'a bird without wings'
similarly
now
advertisements
are considered
as
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a part of human life .
Therefore
, it had a huge impact on the views of
people
.
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