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Some people think that with combined effort on the part of the government and society crime can be completely eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical, and that crime has always been present in societies even in an ancient time. Discuss these two views. Which one do you agree with?

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The contemporary world is not an ideal place to live even though it is assumed as much more convenient than
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crime
 rates.There are different arguments regarding how to eliminate
crimes
 and establish a peaceful
society
 .With regard to that ,some people think the government and
society
 can achieve
this
 target through collaboration,
whereas
 others argue it is not possible by any means.
This
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crime
 is not achievable. On one hand, people consider total eradication of
crime
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possible via collaborative work
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between government and
society
.Because most of the time criminals are born
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society
 as innocent babies and grow into an offender.So it is logical to believe making
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 in the surrounding that they grow can influence who they will be.
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, there is a high tendency of children in
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neighborhood
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 to grow up as criminals
due to
 their social background.So some
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 by improving their social background, will lead to
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 of
crimes
.In short, improvement of living standards and providing education is going to solve the issue ,
according to
this
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On the other hand
, others argue
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 quality of life will not answer the question as
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 of many factors
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 to high rates of
crimes
 in
society
.Low quality of life alone is not the creator but
also
 genetics has something to do with
crimes
.
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, 80% of prisoners having serious mental health issues have conducted a
crime
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research done in the USA Tennesse prison.
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,
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 component is a strong determinant of doing a
crime
. In my opinion, I believe criminals are created with
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contribution
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 environmental and biological factors.
Besides
, efforts from the government and
society
 will not address
this
 biological counterpart.
Hence
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 standard of living will not address
this
 issue alone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • eradicate
  • surveillance
  • education systems
  • stricter laws
  • community policing
  • social welfare programs
  • root causes
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • inherent part of society
  • historical perspectives
  • psychological factors
  • social dynamics
  • criminal behavior
  • enduring examples
  • success stories
  • strategies
  • inevitability
  • exhaustive efforts
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