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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph depicts a comparison
information
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of information
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 by selecting and reporting the main features in different four
countries
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 from 1982 to 2000 in Australia.
Overall
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,
intially
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initially
 the greatest statistic of
students
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 saw Indonesia than other
countries
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,
while
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 the lowest number of
scholar
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scholars
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 witnessed between Hongkong and Singapore in the
last
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 periods.
In addition
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, all
countries
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 experienced a gradual increase
of
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in
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 residence. The line figure for
students
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 selecting and reporting presented a rapid increase between Indonesia and Hong Kong, from 0 to above 10
students
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 in
1000s
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the 1000s
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,
whereas
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 there was
proportion
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a proportion
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 of overseas
students
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 showed a significant boom
of
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in
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 Malaysia in 2000 from under 10 to just about 20.
On the other hand
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,
betweeen
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between
 1996 and 2000 some
countries
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 displayed a slight decline in the main features from around 30 to well lower
20
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than 20
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.
However
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, the line graph of Singapore still witnessed a stable until
last
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 years from under 20 to 20 in the
last
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 decades.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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