The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph illustrates the
number
of thefts vehicles in Great Britain,
Sweden
,
France
and
Canada
between 1990 and 1999.
Overall
,in the beginning,
Sweden
,
France
and
Canada
had amounts less than 10
thousand
,
while
Great Britain had a
number
between 15 and 20
thousand
.
To begin
,the general trends of the three counties were close,
however
,
while
Sweden
and
Canada
had a gentle fall,
France
started to
rise
.
Due to
this
,in 1991,
France
started to decrease and at the same time,
Sweden
became an increasing country.After that year,
France
and
Canada
continued to fall,
while
Sweden
grow from year to year.
However
,in 1993 two outsiders had a change,the
number
of thefts started to grow and did apply till 1995 in
France
and till 1999 in
Canada
.
Hence
to
this
,the leader of these three
Sweden
rise
to 1996 next 2 years the
number
of theft was stable,
however
,in 1998 it continued to grow. The leader in theft numbers was Great Britain,which started with almost 20
thousand
applying them.At the ,beginning it had a gentle
rise
till 1992,after that the
number
decreased,
however
, in the next years till 1996 it continued to
rise
and in 1996 grew to 20
thousand
,but in the following years till the,end it carried to fall.
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