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Increasing the petrol prices is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems

#petrol #prices #traffic #pollution
Numerous
people
 believe that higher
prices
 for gasoline are the best solution for the growing
traffic
 and pollution
problems
.
However
, in my opinion,
this
 measure will not give the expected result.
This
 is because a big part of the problem
is
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trucks
 from companies.
In addition
, there is no substitute for
the
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vehicles. To start with the
trucks
. Many
traffic
 jams are caused by big
trucks
 which transfer materials and other products. Most of the
trucks
 are from retailers to ensure that there is enough stock in their shops. The
trucks
 bring the products to the stores during peak moments.
As a result
, there are a lot of
traffic
 jams during
a
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 day. The consequence of higher petrol
prices
 will probably be higher
prices
 in general.
In addition
, many
people
 who live in the countryside do not have the ability to other forms of transport.
For example
, some
people
 have to walk 30 minutes to the bus stop. Biking or walking to their job or school is impossible because of the distance. An increase in petrol
prices
 will only cause money
problems
. A solution could be that the government will invest more money into the infrastructure.
For instance
, they could give
people
 who invest in electric cars, tax benefits and they could spend more money on public transport.
As a result
, the
traffic
 will decrease and the pollution
problems
 will be tackled.
To conclude
, a higher price of petrol will not help the growing
traffic
 and the pollution
problems
. Great solutions could be developing public transport and giving
people
 tax benefits if they drive an electric car.
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