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Increasing the petrol prices is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems

#petrol #prices #traffic #pollution
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Numerous
people
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 believe that higher
prices
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 for gasoline are the best solution for the growing
traffic
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 and pollution
problems
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.
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, in my opinion,
this
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 measure will not give the expected result.
This
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 is because a big part of the problem
is
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is trucking
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trucks
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 from companies.
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, there is no substitute for
the
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apply
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vehicles. To start with the
trucks
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. Many
traffic
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 jams are caused by big
trucks
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 which transfer materials and other products. Most of the
trucks
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 are from retailers to ensure that there is enough stock in their shops. The
trucks
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 bring the products to the stores during peak moments.
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, there are a lot of
traffic
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 jams during
a
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 day. The consequence of higher petrol
prices
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 will probably be higher
prices
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 in general.
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, many
people
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 who live in the countryside do not have the ability to other forms of transport.
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, some
people
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 have to walk 30 minutes to the bus stop. Biking or walking to their job or school is impossible because of the distance. An increase in petrol
prices
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 will only cause money
problems
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. A solution could be that the government will invest more money into the infrastructure.
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, they could give
people
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 who invest in electric cars, tax benefits and they could spend more money on public transport.
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, the
traffic
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 will decrease and the pollution
problems
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 will be tackled.
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, a higher price of petrol will not help the growing
traffic
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 and the pollution
problems
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. Great solutions could be developing public transport and giving
people
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 tax benefits if they drive an electric car.
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