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Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Most teenagers have an immense influence on celebrities,
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 it does not fit as role models.
People
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 have always another side of the story ,not all you've seen with your naked eye are what the individuals are. There's a saying do not judge the book by its cover.
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, we cannot blame the
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's eyes as a celebrity they have to act ethically in the public to be able to call as a good influencer to youngsters (
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, the way they talked in the public, posting positive messages in their own personal social
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 and carefully doing with their private lives). In , addition sports stars and ,
media
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 stars have a healthy lifestyle wherein
people
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 tend to follow the diet plan and exercise procedures that they are doing every day. It helps the youngster to have a balanced diet and avoid unnecessary hobbies.
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, celebrities have
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 a sense of fashion choice wherein it can help individuals to be more imaginative and creative in regard to their future clothing store.
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, celebrities are
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 human beings that cannot be avoided to do unintended incidents
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 as having an affair,gambling,smoking and drinking in the public, yet posting negative messages on social
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 is one of the trends that cannot be controlled. These kinds of activities are rarely seen especially when the person is in an emotional stage.
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, as influencers, they have to avoid showing bad hobbies in the public. Moving forward sports and
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 stars have the power to let
people
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 follow they're foot stepped.
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 individuals need to be mindful of how they are acting in the public, what they are sharing on social
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 and what they are showing to children. It is not only the celebrity's duty to be a good influencer but all
people
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 have the power to be good role models for one another.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media personalities
  • sports icons
  • role models
  • admiration
  • influence
  • behavior
  • mindset
  • values
  • unethical behavior
  • healthy lifestyles
  • social media platforms
  • celebrity culture
  • career aspirations
  • educational goals
  • positive change
  • ethical standards
  • amplify
  • idolize
  • public perception
  • impressionable
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