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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, most families have to work harder than ever before to survive an average life in most countries.
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,
both
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parents
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 member choose to go out to work for their ongoing and bright
future
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. In
this
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 case, some people argue that
children
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 get benefits from the extra earnings,
while
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 others say they do not have enough
support
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 because of their parent's absence.
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 essay will discuss how
children
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 get educational
support
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 and enough savings for their bright
future
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 from the extra earnings, and how they feel the absence of the emotional
support
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 of their
parents
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 and lack of advice on study guidance and curriculum activities. On the one side, the additional
income
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 earned by
both
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 the
parents
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 of the family can offer some benefits to their
children
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's present and
future
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 careers.
Children
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 can have strong educational
support
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 as their
both
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parents
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 earn well.
This
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 is the main
support
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 that any child needs to grow.
For example
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, In India, those
children
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 whose
both
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parents
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 work full-time basis and earn a steady
income
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, have helped them in achieving their foreign educational career goals. Other than
this
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,
such
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 additional
income
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 helps the
children
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 to have a bright
future
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 and enough liquid cash savings for their
future
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 as their
both
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parents
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 sacrifice their life for them. In my opinion, I believe that the additional
income
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 from the
parents
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 always helps the
children
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 to have robust tuition fees
support
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,
as well as
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future
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 savings in the form of assets.
However
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, some people feel that
children
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 cannot get emotional
support
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 because of their
both
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parents
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' absence.
Children
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's nurturing is very important, especially in today's world. Nurturing the
children
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 and making sure of their well-being and ethical characteristics are all the
parents
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' prime importance.
Apart from
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this
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, most of the
children
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 need educational guidance and curriculum activity selection
support
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 from their
parents
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.
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, in present days all school's curricula are very volatile and sometimes difficult to choose from. In
this
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 case,
parents
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 are the best teacher for their
children
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 to get the desired selection for their career goals. In my view, I think that all
parents
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 should not compromise by giving emotional
support
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 to their
children
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 and study guidance
besides
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 working. In conclusion,
Although
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 the additional
income
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 from
both
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parents
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 helps the
children
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 to have strong educational
support
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 and a bright
future
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, I think every parent of all families must provide enough emotional, cultural and educational
support
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 to their offspring
while
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 working.

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