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These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relvant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the majority of universities started online learning
due to
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 the danger of coronavirus.
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, some
students
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 should take
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 mode of learning as it allows them to avoid attending lectures, even though others believe that studying at university is far more crucial.
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, I would say that attending online
classes
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 is far superior for some reasons which are set out below. Some people would argue that online courses are much more convenient and flexible compared to offline university
classes
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. They can study at their own pace and schedule which is beneficial for those who live far from the educational institution or who have working commitments.
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, they do not have to travel for
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 a long time just to attend three-hour-long
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. I have a friend who is a student from a different country and attends an online learning-based class. She does not have to book an aeroplane ticket or rent a room which is quite expensive.
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, she could save a lot of money as she has no fee for transportation and accommodation, and the flexibility of online learning is an advantage for many
them
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.
On the other hand
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, the offline university-based class offers special benefits,
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 as a structured learning environment and full facilities accessible to
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,
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 as a library, labs, and comfortable classrooms.
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, a student in the medical field requires hands-on practice in laboratories, which is different from online
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, where theory is learnt more than practice.
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,
students
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 and lecturers can have face-to-face interaction with the purpose of having better communication especially when they want to ask questions or have group work. Taking everything into consideration, offline class has their own benefits; yet, I believe that online learning is much more beneficial because
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 can save more money and time,
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 learn
according to
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 their learning pace.

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grammar
Ensure you carefully proofread your work to avoid small grammatical errors such as 'the flexibility of online learning is an advantage for many them.'
support
Try to provide more specific examples from personal experience or widely known facts to strengthen your arguments.
conclusion
Expand slightly more on the conclusion to reinforce the points made throughout the essay. This helps in leaving a lasting impression on the reader.
task response
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion on the topic, meeting the task requirements effectively.
coherence
The essay is well structured, with clear paragraphs devoted to each aspect of the discussion.
cohesion
The ideas are clearly communicated, and the arguments for both sides are logically presented.
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