The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.
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The graphic illustrates the life process of a large type of fish called
salmon
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, the life cycle of the
salmon
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is a natural process and has three cyclical
phase
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phases
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. The beginning is the laying of the
egss
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eggs
and
ending
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ends
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as
full grown
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salmon
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with, the hatching of the
salmon
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eggs is about 5-6 months in the nailbeds of the upper river
which
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where
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the water flows slowly. After four years the
salmon
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eggs
becomes
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fry measuring 3-5 cm that stays in the lower river where the current flows fast. In the lower river where the
salmon
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grows between 12-15 cm and called
as
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a
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"smolt". The smolt swim into the open sea and stayed there for almost 5 years.
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, the significant increase in the
salmon
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size
ranging
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ranges
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from 70-76 cm
where
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when
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it becomes adult.
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cyclical phase can begin again.
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