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Your friend is celebrating her Birthday soon and has invited you to a party. But you are unable to come because you are going to attend an important meeting that day. Write a letter to your friend and * thank her for the invitation; * explain why you cannot come; * propose to meet on other day; You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mary,

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Dear Mary, I hope you are doing well. I am really happy to remember that your birthday is very near which is always a matter of celebration and enjoyment for me. I was delighted to receive the envelope containing your invitation card and I am really very grateful to you for your invitation. But I am a little worried to tell you that, I will not be able to attend the celebration. I am really unlucky
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 time as I have to attend my office meeting exactly the same day as your program. If I explain the emergency you might understand the reason well. My company is going to arrange an annual picnic next month.
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, management has called an immediate meeting to make an
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 plan which is to be finalised within the next two weeks.
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, my boss has given me the duty of collaborating in the meeting.
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 why, I can't avoid joining in any way. I am thinking of a different plan with you as I will certainly miss the enjoyment. I am planning to take a 1-week leave just after my office picnic. So, I am thinking of visiting your place during that period and I expect your office is
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 closed at that time. I am excited to meet you
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 and have some fun together. It's going to be really fun! I am excited to see you soon. Best of luck Shoaib

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs focus on a single idea clearly to enhance readability and flow.
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a more organized transition between paragraphs to connect your points more smoothly.
task achievement
Your tone is warm and friendly, which is perfect for such a personal letter.
task achievement
You clearly explained the reason for your absence and proposed an alternative meeting time.
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