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online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns, do you agree or disagree

#reason #shops #cities #towns
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It is considered that the cause of the shutdown of the processes of the shops in the cities and towns will be online shopping. I do not agree with that since shopping through online sites will not be able to
fulfill
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 the
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 needs far away. On the one hand, buying goods and services through the internet has become a trend nowadays with the improvement of technologies and human life. People tend to order their necessities since they do not need to visit the store by themselves and it saves a lot of
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 from their life.
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, with the pandemic
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 they have more and more tried to do
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 since it was ensure their health. Another thing is that
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 the particular product is not in their own country, they could easily find it through websites or apps and place the order.
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, the user is not capable to sense the product by touching it when adding the product to the cart.
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 ordering clothes they are unable to feel the texture and decide whether it is good or bad for their skin. Not only that but
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 the
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 it takes to deliver will be days or weeks and the client will be frustrated because of the delay.
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 it needs to be delivered within a day, it may take more
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. The security of the payments is
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 another concern that will lead to internet shopping can be demotivated. Users expect full security for their confidential details
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 as card numbers,
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 numbers so if the sites are misusing their details it will be a huge effect
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 online shopping stores.
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 there are a number of advantages of shopping through options like web applications or mobile applications, the disadvantages are more. That can conclude that online businesses which deliver user needs will not be the reason for disappearing stores.
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