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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others thing that employee should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are lots of companies increasing day by day and it is
vaery
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very
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manager
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the manager
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. Some think that it could be better if
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manager
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the manager
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 involves
employees
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 in
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decision-making
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the decision-making
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 process. I
also
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 believe that would be better to involve
employees
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 in
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the decision
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decision
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decisions
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they
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so they
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 can suggest more answers and make
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a strong
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decision
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decisions
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 for
companies
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companies'
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 achievement. On the one
hand
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,Managers have the
rights
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right
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 to make decisions but they don't know
the
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every
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very
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 little
things
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 or any particular mistakes that
made
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are made
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 by
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the employee
an employee
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employee
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employees
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. If
manager
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 involved their best
employees
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 who are experienced and have vast knowledge
in
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 the product.
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,
employees
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knows
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the
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what to do in
problem
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a problem
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 and find out the mistakes and
suggests
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suggest
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 to the
manager
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and
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apply
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so on
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manager
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a manager
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 can make
better
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a better
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decision
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, in some company
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manager
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managers
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 made a
decision
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 on the work hours and timing. But every
employee
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don't
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isn't
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 able to get on timing.
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Also
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wor
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work
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does't
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doesn't
complete
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due to
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 lake of hours.
Employee
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 complaint about time to make
conveinent
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convenient
 and get
a work
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work
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 done.
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hand
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,
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Manager
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the Manager
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 takes responsibility
of
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for
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every thing
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everything
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 in
company
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the company
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 and
this
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 is very hard to handle everything with
single
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a single
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hand
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.
Although
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, it would be never done with
single
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a single
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hand
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 and face
the
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apply
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lots of problems it would be solved by
other
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another employee
other employees
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employee
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with
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helping them. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
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the Employee
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Employee
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Employees
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 and
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manager
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managers
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 should make a team to make a new
decision
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.

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