Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.
Some
people
argue that, due to
the advancement of technology
people
have become closer, while
others argue that new technology
is the reason to separate people
more. This
essay agrees with the argument that “new technology
makes people
closer” and discusses it further
.
On the one hand, technology
has improved the methods we have been using to communicate with each other and provides more facilities. In the beginning, basic devices used for communication, such
as telephone, telegraph machines, mail etc…, which provided facilities for only voice calls, have been improved gradually and at the moment people
are able to conduct virtual meetings via video conferencing facilities provided by social media, internet, smartphones etc. Moreover
, with the support of internet coverage, smartphones and social media have enabled people
to a limitless, instant communication regardless of location. For instance, before few years ago, in my department, if there was a need to conduct an official meeting, all participants had to gather in one place and conduct the meeting physically. But at present, almost all of the meetings are conducted online via Zoom, which provides the same experience and fulfils the requirements of the meeting.
On the other hand
, heavy usage of the internet and social media makes people
spend more time with their laptops and smartphones, which results in the reduction of physical gatherings. Due to
the above, the separation between people
has increased. The new generation of youth is the best example of this
issue. But this
issue can be overcome by implementing proper activities among youth, which will make them engage in more physical activities.
In conclusion, I believe that the new technology
supports people
to become closer, regardless of time and location. However
, proper measures should be taken to avoid addictions.Submitted by dmsangeeth on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on one main point and is developed effectively. Consider breaking down complex sentences for clarity.
task achievement
Although relevant examples are provided, try to integrate them more seamlessly into your arguments. Ensure that every example directly supports the point being made.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion present, which accurately outline and summarize the argument.
task achievement
Essay discusses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion, meeting the task requirements effectively.
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