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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
"Nowadays,
traveling
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 to other countries is increasing dramatically, and most
of
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the
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people
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believe
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 that when someone wants to Start a new life in a foreign they Should
respect
 and obey their traditions, I totally agree with
this
 statement that when you go
abrad
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abroad
 the
country
 you should be familiar with their
customes
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customers
customs
 and
rules
,
while
 I partially disagree with
this
 because of some
religeous
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religious
customes
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customers
customer
 in
other
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another country
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country
.
O n
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 the one hand, it is true that when Someone Migrate to
other
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country
 they should follow and understand their cultural
rules
,
Secondly
 when they visit a
country
 they should Search and ask about their
custom
 to avoid absticalss when they live there. For
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instance
 in
2018
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 I went to North Korea and I faced too
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Stricted
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Restricted
 traditional
rules
.
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 people
respect
 their leader as a god and you can't disrespect him, and
also
 they never copy their
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 and some other things because
this
 is against their
Custom
 rule and regulation.
On the other hand
, it's hard to follow every rule and regulation of their tradition, because every
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religion
 has
their
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 own
rules
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, for example,
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for example
 an
indian
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 guy will never eat beef or because
this
 is like
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 in their religion and
custom
, but as a
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Muslim
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this
 is normal to eat some animals meat. So
that is
 why we should not follow and
respect
 every tradition rate and
custom
 because you will disobey your own religious
cultural
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and cultural
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rules
 and regulations In conclusion, in my
opinion
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every one
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 should
respect
 and follow other
countries
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countries'
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Custom
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 and culture when
you
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 want to reside there, but as
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far
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 as you would not against your own
custom
 and culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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