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One of the major problems that faces today’s government is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations, whilst still trying to protect the environment.

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It is important to consider that a good economy employs the right mix of urban and natural space to balance both
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 rich heritage and development. Every council face the challenge
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 creating reasonable housing infrastructure to cater
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 raising demand in growth, despite protecting their environment. In
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Firstly
, special government reforms in planning for urban spaces
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 allocated for development
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 paramount.
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 uncontrolled land spaces, sewage
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systems
, and floor space indexes can lead to a greater impact in future.
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, almost 60% of the
overall
 flooding across the
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 is
due to
 the lack of quality in planning the urban expansion by building skyscrapers on the bed of a lake.
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 of certain land usage for downtown expansion by building several skyscrapers and
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 for natural
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 by leaving untouched can strike the balance between both
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economic
economical
 growth and environmental protection.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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