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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driver less. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be. Passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Every company is trying to add some new feature in their
vehicles
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, some
people
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 argue that in the upcoming few years, transportation will be
driverless
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 and inside those
vehicles
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 who are travelling will be Passengers. I accept that
driverless
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cars
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 will have some pros for the public
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 for the government in helping the traffic system, yet I believe that these types of
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 will bring some cons as technical and environmental
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 On the one hand, Self-driving
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 will help
people
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 to drive without
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 driver
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 because of that
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people
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, people
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 are free to
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this
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 time with their family and friends and watch some movies
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 travelling.
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, these
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 are controlled by AI
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 will avoid traffic jams and
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 so everyone will be on time in their offices.
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 in European
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countries,
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 most of the cities are popular and have a lot of population
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 visitors face traffic problems
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,
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cars
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 are the best option for their governments to invest money in self-driving industries.
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, these programmed
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 have
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 disadvantages.
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, accuracy is the main issue because
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that
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people
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 will never believe in AI as much as humans.
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, Unemployment is another problem
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vehicles
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, because a large proportion of
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 are driving taxis or working with online companies like Uber.
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lastly
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, these types of
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 are too
much
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expensive and because of that, it's hard for third-class
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 to afford them. In conclusion,
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vehicles
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 will have some impacts on our society, but I still believe that
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 can't overshadow the advantages of self-driving
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.

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structure
Make your main point clear at once and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
content
Add more detail to each point with simple facts or examples.
grammar
Check grammar and sentence form; use short, plain clause to make ideas clear.
usage
Keep a steady tone and use common words; avoid too many hard words.
planning
Plan your essay before writing: intro with your view, two body parts on each side, and a short ending.
stance
You show a clear view and keep a sense of both sides.
cohesion
You use a link in a simple way with On the one hand / On the other hand.
content
You give an example (Europe cities) to back a point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Driverless technology
  • Traffic efficiency
  • Cybersecurity
  • Data privacy
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic impacts
  • Accessibility
  • Social inclusion
  • Emissions
  • Fuel consumption
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Human error
  • Congestion
  • Independence
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