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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days the environment is suffering from crucial problems and we must pay attention to it .The question is what is the main cause of these issues is it the decreasing number of particular species of plants and animals or there is more vital problems? In
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 I am going to discuss both views and give my own belief. In terms of causes, I believe that there is a more important complication than the loss of vegetation and animals
for example
 Climate Change . The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that the weather has been changing in various ways not like how it used to be
specially
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 in the
last
 period. To illustrate, in 2022, the temperatures were above normal and it said that it was the warmest year since 1900.
In other words
, the outcomes were negative it is
also
 said that the ratio of deaths was more than 15 per cent,
furthermore
, it affected the
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 in a downside way.
Hence
 it
costed
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 the governments a lot of consequences in the damaged nations to face
this
 phase . In conclusion,
although
 it is indispensable to have variety in nature and every creature has
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 own portion to deal with the loss of these plants and the animal is not the main issue to the environment,
on the other
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 Climate change has made a fluctuation in a humans life and
this
 phenomenon impacted enormous things.
Therefore
, I believe that the individual and the government should concentrate on a way to tackle
this
 problem
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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