Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Some people think that some children need to choose what subject they want. Others believe that they should only be allowed to
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the subject that schools think it necessary
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as mathematics and philosophy. In my point of view, I agree with the first group. There are some benefits of making some objects optional.
First,
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it can be easy to see that if some
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are optional, children can get motivation in studying. It is easy to understand, no one likes to
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some
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that they do not want because for so many reasons
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as they do not good at it or they hate it for some reason.
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, it saves time for
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if they
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subjects
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that are related to their future jobs.
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, some
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want to be a doctor,
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so they
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can choose some
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that are related to their job like math, biology,...
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, It can make
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independent because they have to choose their
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and be responsible for their choice. In life, they need to be independent, and not always depend on their parents or others, f in the future, they are poor or anything else can happen, they have to be responsible for their choice.
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, there are some drawbacks to making some
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optional. Some
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do not have knowledge about the long-term result of their choice. Some
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make instinctive choices and do not care about the long-term result.
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, some
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are influenced by their friends and make a decision depending on what their friends want to
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instead
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of their needs. In conclusion,
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many people think that
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need to
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some
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compulsory, I personally believe that
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have to choose what subject that they want is better.
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