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International travelling is advantages for them and for the country they visited. Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages.

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Vacation abroad is one of the most popular things to do and with the great development of air transportation
such
 as planes, it makes
people
 easier to visit other countries. It is believed with travelling to various places can give a beneficial effect not only
for
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 the person who did it but
also
for
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 the state that has been visited.
Firstly
, from the advantages side, travelling can be an effective way to promote a region to many
people
. Tourists usually take various photos and videos to capture precious moments when they go to a new place and upload it to their social media.
Then
, when their followers find it interesting, it can lead to a boost in the total number of tourists in that region.
Secondly
, International travelling can broaden networking and business between countries.
For example
, Bali in Indonesia often being a film shooting location for
an international production houses
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an international production house
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 because of their natural beauty and unique culture.
While
 they are doing film production in Bali, can give the opportunity
the
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 local
people
 to involve and enhance their skills. The increase in
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community’s earnings and knowledge,
also
 the country’s revenue the main impact of
this
 phenomenon.
On the other hand
, there are a few disadvantages impacts from international travelling
such
 as a foreign tourist can give a bad effect on local
people
due to
 the difference in culture.
For example
, there
is
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 cases where foreign tourist the inappropriate way like being naked when they visit a religious place or in some Asian countries, western visitors kissed on the lips in
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public area that
it
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which
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 is not allowed. In conclusion, I believe travelling abroad will give more benefits than bad impacts as long as tourists can respect the regulation in each nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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