The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph compares the contribution to the state's economy by fuel exported from the year 2000 - 20025.
Though, Fuel has a major impact on finance.
Additionally
, money was also
made from other like food and goods manufactured locally. Initially
, the business started out fine, making about 30,000 million dollars. Later on, unexpectedly, there was a steady fall reaching its lowest in the year 2002.
Then
surprisingly, the slope went high in the coming years, which not only helped in recovering its losses,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
, added appraisal by 5000 million dollars . Thereafter
, there was never a looking back as it went constantly increasing, finally
reaching up to 450000 million dollars by the end of the year 2005. In the conclusion, transporting locally made products from one country to the other, always had a positive impact on the state budget. although
, the rate was a little fluctuating but always consistent.Submitted by sreya.nimmagadda9 on
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