IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

There are more and more effective security measures in large cities to reduce the crime. For example, installation of anti-crime devices in cities. Does this endeavour bring more benefits than problems?

#security #measures #cities #crime #installation #devices #endeavour
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Compared with the past, methods of security measuring have dramatically changed all over the world. These days, we have effective security measures in large cities to reduce crime. In my opinion, the benefits of
this
Linking Words
 situation outweigh the problems. First of all, the most advantage of fighting against crime is making a safe country.
For example
Linking Words
, if the government applies new rules about serious crimes
such
Linking Words
 as street crime and
also
Linking Words
 put penalties on someone who doesn't follow the laws,
therefore
Linking Words
, becomes a safe country where everyone is calm.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some people think that paying money for the installation of anti-crime is so expensive and better to pay for something else
such
Linking Words
 as renewing roads.
However
Linking Words
, the most important qualities of the country are safe.
For instance
Linking Words
, in Iran, we are concerned
while
Linking Words
 we are at walking on the street because the thief steals our phones. In conclusion, safety issues are important worldwide.
Submitted by Niyoshakhalili on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: