The diagram shows how sugar is processed from sugar cane.

The process diagram illustrates how

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is extracted and processed from

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cane.

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, from the moment

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plants

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start growing until they are picked and processed, there are 8 stages.

Initially

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plants

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take between 12 to 18 months to grow before they are harvested

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When

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are grown they are harvested using special machinery or picked by hand.

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sugar

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plants

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are crushed and juice is extracted from the

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cane.

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purifying the juice by putting it into the limestone filter followed by boiling the juice in the evaporator where it is turned into syrup.

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, the syrup goes through the Centrifuge where

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crystals are separated from the syrup and the

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is dried and cooled.

Niamh GalMon Feb 20 2023

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Topic Vocabulary:

sugar cane
planting
harvesting
mature
manual cutting
machinery
crushing
extract
juice
purification
impurities
crystallization
evaporation
thicken
syrup
seeded
sugar crystals
centrifugation
separate
drying
packaging
distribution

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The diagram shows how sugar is processed from sugar cane.

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