In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is greater than in the past. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, people are getting married considerably later compare with decades ago.
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the
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difference between parents and their children is essentially great. Some people believe that they are wrong with it because it hurts many aspects of life.
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, others think that
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development has a plethora of benefits. I personally side with the former view which will be discussed in
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with, having children
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older
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has many health issues. The chance to have a baby is the biggest problem. Scientists from Germany have proved that the chance to make a baby
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a young
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instead
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of in old
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, mental diseases are considered
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an issue. Recently,
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professor D. from Kazakh National University announced that the people get older
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make
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a choice is harder. It means that
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people
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when
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40 wanted a partner with the same emotional and educational level as they are and
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to find
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this
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person is more difficult.
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, one of the great Kazakh writer and philosopher said that you are better to grow up with your child. What he means by saying
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is that life is more interesting with getting older with
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child and you
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closer. Take
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being one hundred years ago as an example. In most parts of the
world
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the
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of 20 was considered too late for getting married.
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,
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generation
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more aware
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life. In conclusion, it’s much better
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children
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younger
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still
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than
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in mid-
age
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. In my opinion, it is a fact that nowadays
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the difference
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in
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is greater than in the past. But I strongly disagree with
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the benefits
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of that outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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.
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