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The personal information of many individuals is held by large Internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
due to
 advancement in technology,
almost
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 of
personal
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the personal
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information
 of residents are managed by internet
companies
 and organizations which makes many concerned about that development. Honestly, there are some pros and cons;
however
, in my opinion, I reckon the disadvantages of
this
 outweigh the advantages.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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this
 view. There is no denying that there are some benefits when a lot of
companies
 have users’
information
. When
people
 apply their personal
information
 on the pages,
this
 creates
great
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condition
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conditions
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 for business
companies
 to catch up hobbies or interests of customers. A good case in
this
 point is a person who
want
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 to catch a taxi can share the place for drives to pick up. In fact, there are many big
companies
 using
people
’s
information
 in order to make their services more suitable
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 consumers.
However
, one of
essential
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 considerations is there are still numerous threats
in
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 privacy policies
in
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 the internet. Some
of
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companies
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the companies
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 have failed in protecting
user’s
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users’
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information
 from hackers which leads to a bunch of problems. One
of
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familiar
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the familiar
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examples
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 of
this
 is many accounts
of
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 Facebook have been hacked and revealed their sensitive
information
 on
the
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social networking that
have
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profound
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effect
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effects
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 on daily lives. Indeed, plenty of
people
, especially youngsters and the elderly are bothered and annoyed by advertisements or strange calls. Some
people
 decided to commit suicide because they were cheated
all
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 of
money
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 and property. From what has been discussed above we may draw the conclusion that
people
 should be careful when
provide
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 their
information
with
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to
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 organizations.
Besides
, it is really vital for governments to enact laws to prevent
companies
 from intentionally
having
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wrongdoing and affecting
resident’s
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residents’
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 lives negatively.
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