Living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The phenomenon of
people
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who live in
big
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city
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seems more physical problems than
people
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who live in the countryside has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
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's views on
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issue in question may be, I disagree that urban
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is the reason why
people
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get less healthy. Of all the reasons why poor
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and urban
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have not
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directly
connection, probably the most significant one is that maintaining a
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health
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body
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mainly
depand
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depend
depends
on individual
health
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management.
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, you can imagine someone
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in
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and faster foods are his major diet every day. After a few years, it was easy to predict his bad physical condition.
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, someone who
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exercises every day and only
eat
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food that great for his
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.
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he lives in a big
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, his
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still
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stronger than others when he gets old. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that
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urban
Cuban
cities
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have more entertainment in order to keep
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citizens
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mentally and physically healthy.
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, big
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have relatively more activities than small
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such
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as sports clubs,
dances
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clubs, cooking lessons, etc... More population means more
diversity
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events will be held.
People
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can do want they want with their friends who have the same interests.
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experimental report,
people
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who feel happy and satisfied about their life is healthier than those who are not. Under
this
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line of thinking, it seems to me that living in
a big
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a big city
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cities
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is not the main reason why their
body
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have
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a
lot
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problems. Their bad life behaviours are the main threat to their
body
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.
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, I disagree that living location will cause physical issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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