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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As the economy is advancing by leaps and bounds,
people
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 attach great importance to financial management. Under
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 circumstance, an absolute consensus can hardly be reached as to whether all the food should be produced for its community and import as little food as possible. In my opinion, I side with the opponents to the large extent based on the following sound reasons.
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, it is noteworthy that manufacturing capabilities would be dissimilar depending on different
countries
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. Many studies have shown that
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 it is invisible, developing
countries
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 do not have enough high-technology machines to produce their own foods as fast to provide to their
people
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.
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 Cambodian newspaper research, there are a lot of farming resources in the country, but the fact is that Cambodian
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 usually export paddies to others to make them into eatable rice.
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, another reason why I disagree is that
countries
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 that are in cold areas
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Japan
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, it does not have enough soil to make farmlands. Even though
Japan
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 is one of the most developed
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 with numerous high-class amenities, the fact is that Japanese
people
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 do not have places in order to crop for themselves.
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, Niigata city is one of some farmlands in
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, but
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 the bad weather,
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 too hot during the summer and it has terribly cold in the winter, farmers can not cultivate during the whole year.
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Japan
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 can not make enough foodstuff for its folk. In conclusion, I am convinced that a country should produce by itself and import stuff as balanced.
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