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It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages

#people #risks #lives
It can be either in our career or in our personal
life
, it’s essential for us to take big steps. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the advantages and disadvantages of taking risks in
life
 and how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In order to get success, one needs to face so many hurdles along the way, without confronting situations bravely it’s not possible. One needs to come out of his or her comfort zone to
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 their skills or strengthen their mind.
For instance
, one businessman what to launch a new product in the market which has around
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 success rate but if he did succeed, he can gain an astronomical amount of money. It’s not only in the work field but
also
 in our personal
life
, when two people like each other, he or she needs to confess their feelings so that they can take their relationship to another level. On another hand, nowadays so many students taking courses which have no development or slim chances of getting jobs, so they end up with no jobs or they are forced to join another field they don’t like to earn money. These days breakups are so frequent among couples; after they got separated some are becoming depressed. Even in the case of the married couple, they are getting divorced, which is affecting their
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 lives, these kids are under stress that they can’t enjoy their childhood. I will end
this
 by saying that the benefits we get are more than the disadvantages
while
 taking risks in
life
. In our
life
 to get something better we should be ready to face all adversities.
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  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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