The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of

crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates how the three types of crimes number changed throughout the period in question in the centre of New Port.
Overall
, the number of car theft and robbery remained roughly stable,
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the burglary’ figure dropped over the span of the graph. In the first year, 2003, burglary stood at slightly less than 3500 incidents and it dipped dramatically to reach around 1250 over a period of 5 years after it saw a small increase.
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250 events until 2009, after which it stayed relatively stable for 3 years. It is observed that the number of car theft and robbery were nearly 3000 and almost 500 respectively at the beginning. Robbery events
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fluctuation during the given time and there was almost no change in the numbers of it.
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, car theft cases remained at almost 2750 from 2003 to 2005 and it saw a sudden fall to reach 2000 in 2006, which is followed by
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marginal growth in 2007.
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, the figures showed a fluctuation until the end of the period.
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