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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
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data
datas
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data
 on the underground railway network in six different cities (London, Paris Tokyo, Washington,
kyoto
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 and
Los
Angeles
)
Overall
, As seen from
information
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,London had the oldest and the largest train network system
where as
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Los
Angeles
 was the
latested
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latest
 station compared with other cities.
Firstly
, London station was established in 1863 with 394 km of route and 775 million passengers
per
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annual
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.
On the other hand
,interesting points
was
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 Paris and Tokyo were the two countries which opened systems in 1900 and 1927 with 199 and 155 respectively routes way but largest passenger per
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 1191 and 1927 respectively.
Furthermore
,
kyoto
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 and
Los
Angeles
both
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 established recently in 1981 and 2001 with
less
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 routes areas 11 and 28 respectively with
average
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45
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 million's passengers.
Additionally
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 Washington was the earliest and largest railway station
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 to
2
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above countries
kyoto
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 and
Los
Angeles
 which is established in 1976 with
126
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 km long route
and144
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and 144
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millions
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 people.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words los, angeles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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