Some people think that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing contribute more towards a child's overall development. The school curriculum should provide more time for these subjects to be taught if the school wants all-round development of children.

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Few sections of society prefer to think that

subjects

, namely arts, music, drama and creative writing

provides

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more towards a

student

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overall

growth.

As a result

, the school syllabus should

gives

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time

for these

subjects

to be taught for the purpose of

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the all-round

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all-round

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all-around

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development of juveniles. I

partial

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agree with

afore mentioned

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statement.

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essay will substantiate my views with relevant examples followed by the conclusion. To embark with, including these creative

acivities

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activities

in the syllabus have many benefits.

Firstly

, these

subjects

require creativity and distinct imagination to

excell

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excel

, as a

concequence

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consequence

, a pupil can

deveop

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develop

different skills.

For instance

, in any well-known

paintings

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there is

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apply

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great imagination

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student

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a student

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focuses to paint creatively, in the way it thrives his thinking process.

In addition

, the student can

chose

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their carrier path in the stream that he or she has passion

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for

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Thus

, it allows pupils to focus more on their

intrested

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interested

subject.

On the other hand

, there are some downsides, nowadays the mother

tounge

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tongue

languages

are being endangered

due to

giving more preference to the main

academeic

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academic

subjects

like maths, physics,

biology

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and biology

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. If the school management provides more

time

extracurcular

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extracurricular

extra-curricular

subjects

then

there is no

time

left for

the

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languages

Hence

, these

subjects

become major threats to the

languages

. To illustrate, my sister studies in

the

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school that includes

advance

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subjects

, and dance classes, and their focus is on

english

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, but they neglected

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the telugu

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telugu

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language,

as a

result

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she does not know how to read or write

telugu

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To conclude

, the creative

subjcets

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subjects

play a pivotal role to thrive

child's

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a child's

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thinking ability and creativity,

besides

it is a threat to

languages

, I believe providing restricted

time

to those

subjets

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subjects

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is lucrative for the children.

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Some people think that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing contribute more towards a child's overall development. The school curriculum should provide more time for these subjects to be taught if the school wants all-round development of children.

Your opinion

1. Some people say that arts subject such as painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this what can be done to solve this problem.

Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say there are more important environment problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, more and more choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?