“Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.” To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, being a mother stood up one step forward than being a
father
. Being a parent in
this
century might look
little
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selfish to you. What about
for
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your significant other? Did you ask your partner if he/she want to become a parent before getting pregnant or after you found out you are going to have a
baby
? In
this
essay
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I will argue the statement
with
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both ways and
examples
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. On one hand, I have seen a lot of divorce scenes in
this
my mortal life as a family law attorney. Some cases
was
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really extraordinary and I would like to share one of them with you. I had a
client
who got pregnant with a man who is already married. The man in the story wanted an affair but not
serious
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relationship. My
client
wanted
to
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a
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mother so she can take
advantages
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from
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baby’s
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father
. In the court, we declared that
father
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has to
involved
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with
baby’s
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stipends and special days.
Also
, my
client
asked if she can get some money for herself too. But Supreme Court
said
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“Your(
Client
) intention was not innocent so the biological
father
of the
baby
does not have to be involved
anything
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to
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with her.” In
this
case, we saw that we cannot force anyone to do stuff.
On the other hand
, in Islam even though many people
does
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not know your male partner can not force you to have a
baby
. It is forbidden to force
female
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partner
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.
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coming directly from the Almighty.
Hence
, if he wants to have a
baby
and she gives birth, he has to take care of the
baby
and the wife.
For
example
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if the wife asks for
housekeeper
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a housekeeper
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and a
baby sitter
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for the
baby
the husband has to provide. As a Muslim and as
woman
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a woman
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,
this
is the most beautiful part of the religion. In conclusion, we can not urge anyone to do anything especially when it comes to
have
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a
baby
. I think women have to right in their hands to become
a parents
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and raise them but only if their intention is good.
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