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government should not spend too much money on projects

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It is a fact that the authorities spend a lot of
money
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 to discover
life
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 on other
planets
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. Many
people
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 believe that it is a waste of
money
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, and the
money
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 should be spent on social problems. In my opinion, I have to agree with
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 statement.
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 is because there is a significant increase in poor
people
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.
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, it is not even sure that there is actually
life
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 on
planets
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. I will now explain my arguments
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 in detail in the following paragraphs. To start with the poor
people
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. Civilians have nowadays less
money
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 to spend.
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 is because inflation is very high.
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, the cost of bread was 1 euro in 2021 and the same bread is now 2 euros. A dramatic increase! The authorities should first solve the
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 issues of the civilians before they start to invest in unnecessary projects. Another reason is that
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 it is not even sure that there is actually
life
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 on
planets
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. Scientists did much research but do not even know if there is actually
life
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 on
planets
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. thisDespite, the
government
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 spend
million
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 of euros on research projects.
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, the
government
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 spent a lot of
money
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 on spaceships that could transfer
people
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 to Mars.
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, it crashed and the millions were gone. Opponents argue that the world population have risen heavily since the 20th century, and they predict that the earth will be too full soon. I believe that
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 problem is not a worry for today because we have other more important issues to fix,
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, high inflation.
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, the
government
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 should not spend
money
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 on projects to discover
life
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. The
government
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 should first solve the problems society has now, and there is no proof that there is
life
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 on earth.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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