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government should not spend too much money on projects

#government #money #projects
It is a fact that the authorities spend a lot of
money
 to discover
life
 on other
planets
. Many
people
 believe that it is a waste of
money
, and the
money
 should be spent on social problems. In my opinion, I have to agree with
this
 statement.
This
 is because there is a significant increase in poor
people
.
In addition
, it is not even sure that there is actually
life
 on
planets
. I will now explain my arguments
further
 in detail in the following paragraphs. To start with the poor
people
. Civilians have nowadays less
money
 to spend.
This
 is because inflation is very high.
For example
, the cost of bread was 1 euro in 2021 and the same bread is now 2 euros. A dramatic increase! The authorities should first solve the
money
 issues of the civilians before they start to invest in unnecessary projects. Another reason is that
,
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 it is not even sure that there is actually
life
 on
planets
. Scientists did much research but do not even know if there is actually
life
 on
planets
. thisDespite, the
government
 spend
million
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 of euros on research projects.
For instance
, the
government
 spent a lot of
money
 on spaceships that could transfer
people
 to Mars.
However
, it crashed and the millions were gone. Opponents argue that the world population have risen heavily since the 20th century, and they predict that the earth will be too full soon. I believe that
this
 problem is not a worry for today because we have other more important issues to fix,
for example
, high inflation.
To conclude
, the
government
 should not spend
money
 on projects to discover
life
. The
government
 should first solve the problems society has now, and there is no proof that there is
life
 on earth.
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