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Many people think that the world should speak one language, others argue that countries should have its own languages. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some
people
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 argue that a universal
language
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 should be spoken all over the world
while
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 others believe to maintain the originality of the dialect in any
countries
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. For others, having
a
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uniformity in the
language
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 spoken is important for better understanding.
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, the uniqueness of the different languages would preserve the culture of the nation. I believe, speaking in
one
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language
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 is vital to all mankind for effective communication. Many individuals think that preserving their own languages is an aspect of a unique identity of a country.
People
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 conserve the
distintiveness
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distinctiveness
 of the different dialects because it signifies the traditions and customs.
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language
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 is a form of art that could
be pass
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 down to the next generation.
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, in the
Philippine's
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 different dialects are being integrated as part of the school curriculum to inculcate in the young minds and
heart
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 of the students.
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 measure is rigorously
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 to preserve the heritage culture.
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, I believe speaking
a
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one
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language
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 promotes harmonious
relationship
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relationships
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 among nations.
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, having
one
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language
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 is important because it is a way to communicate with other
people
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. Other
people
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 think
,
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 if all mankind speaks and writes
same
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the same
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word
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words
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 it would create a peaceful world.
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this
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, speaking
same
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the same
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language
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 would result in
an
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effective work performance.
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, working as an expatriate nurse in
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 hospital with different nationalities and the essence of speaking English would promote success rate in managing the patient. In conclusion, others think speaking a diverse
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 would preserve the culture of the
people
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 speaking it whilst some argue
one
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language
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 is crucial for an efficient conversation
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 other
people
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 in the world.
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, I believe that it is
more
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essential for all
people
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 to speak in
one
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language
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 for
easy
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an easy
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 and smooth conversation.
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