Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some
people
argue more can be done to prevent the crimes
while
others think
crimnal
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criminal
criminals
dont
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don't
care about
laws
. I believe some actions can help to reduce the
crime
rates
but no measure can ever fully
elimnate
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eliminate
the bad deeds done by
people
. I
beleive
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believe
we can take some steps to reduce
the
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apply
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crime
. More strict
laws
helps
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to decrease the
rates
of
the
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apply
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crime
. The hard punishments like
life long
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life-long
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prison,stops
people
from
commiting
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committing
crime
.
for example
saundi
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Saudi
sound
arabia
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is one of the
country
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countries
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with strict
laws
which resulted in lower
crime
rates
.
Also
, Highly educated
people
are less tend to be
involved
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less involved
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in illegal activities. Proper education can
also
indirectly result in lower
crime
rates
.
On the other hand
,
i
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I
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believe
what ever
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whatever
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action we take we
cannnot
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cannot
stop bad things
happening
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from happening
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. The person who commits
crime
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a crime
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dont
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don't
care about any
laws
.
Moreover
mentally
distrub
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disturbed
disturb
people
can not
distinguidh
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distinguish
between good
or
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and
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bad so
sometmes
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sometimes
they do crazy
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
Moreover
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poverty can lead you to take some harsh steps which may not be appropriate. In
conlusion
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conclusion
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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what ever
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whatever
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step we take ,there will be certain
people
who will still be involved in criminal activities but
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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we have to be
continously
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continuously
working toward reducing
crime
rates
to keep society functioning.
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