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Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 argue more can be done to prevent the crimes
while
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 others think
crimnal
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criminal
criminals
dont
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don't
 care about
laws
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. I believe some actions can help to reduce the
crime
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rates
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 but no measure can ever fully
elimnate
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eliminate
 the bad deeds done by
people
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.
Body paragraph 1
I
beleive
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believe
 we can take some steps to reduce
the
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apply
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crime
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. More strict
laws
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helps
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help
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 to decrease the
rates
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 of
the
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apply
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crime
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. The hard punishments like
life long
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 prison,stops
people
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 from
commiting
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committing
crime
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.
for example
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saundi
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Saudi
sound
arabia
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 is one of the
country
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countries
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 with strict
laws
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 which resulted in lower
crime
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rates
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.
Also
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, Highly educated
people
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 are less tend to be
involved
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less involved
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 in illegal activities. Proper education can
also
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 indirectly result in lower
crime
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rates
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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 ,
i
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I
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 believe
what ever
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whatever
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 action we take we
cannnot
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cannot
 stop bad things
happening
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from happening
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. The person who commits
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crime
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a crime
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dont
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don't
 care about any
laws
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.
Moreover
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 mentally
distrub
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disturbed
disturb
people
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 can not
distinguidh
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distinguish
 between good
or
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and
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 bad so
sometmes
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sometimes
 they do crazy
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
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Moreover
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 poverty can lead you to take some harsh steps which may not be appropriate.
Conclusion
In
conlusion
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conclusion
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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what ever
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whatever
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 step we take ,there will be certain
people
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 who will still be involved in criminal activities but
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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 we have to be
continously
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continuously
 working toward reducing
crime
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rates
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 to keep society functioning.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime prevention
  • Law enforcement
  • Surveillance
  • Deterrence
  • Social services
  • Root causes
  • Community-based programs
  • Rehabilitation
  • Repeat offenses
  • Inevitable
  • Crime statistics
  • Governmental power
  • Systemic issues
  • Corruption
  • Technology
  • Data analysis
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Predict and prevent
  • Privacy concerns
  • Ethical issues
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