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The chart
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shows
 how much
time
 and with whom a child spends weekdays and weekends from 0-1 to 8-9 ages.
Firstly
,
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 weekdays we can see that from 0-1 to 8-9 years a child spends most of the
time
 with mom, a little
while
 with Dad and the same
time
 with them.
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,
in
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 weekends the level of
time
 has changed dramatically than weekdays.
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Both Dad and Mom have a higher level, and position which is With Dad has so low degree from 0-1 to 8-9 years than With mom
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