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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of
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 is arguable.
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 it is a commonly held belief that fast
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 high in sugars and fats may become highly spread and it may exchange the traditional
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. From my perspective, I strongly believe that
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 may increase
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in popularity and it may gradually substitute the
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's old
cuisine
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. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why I believe that. On one hand,
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food
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 may substitute
old
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cuisine
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 because it is easy to prepare.
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, with the increasing load in the workplace, people are tired and they tend to depend on fast
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 in their daily routine as they do not have time to cook their traditional meals. To illustrate, in the long run,
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 might forget how to cook their old
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 recipe. Indeed,
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 makes it clear that fast
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 may gradually replace the
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's old
cuisine
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.
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, the community has become more attracted to online applications.
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, a prestigious journal article published that 80% of juveniles had used hunger station (an online application to order
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) to order fast
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 every day. Clearly, most teenagers use online applications to order
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food
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 which might cause people to forget how to prepare their own
country
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's old
cuisine
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.
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, it becomes apparent that fast
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 may exchange for old
cuisine
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. In conclusion, fast
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 might substitute
country
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 traditional
food
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.
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 is because
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food
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 eases
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 busy life,
as well as
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due to
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 the increased use of online applications. In my opinion, I consider that spreading
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food
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 might replace
country
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 old
cuisine
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 and
hence
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 requires more attention.
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