In order to reduce crime, we need to attack the cause of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities. It’s not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people into prison. Do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that crime happens every day in each countries cause the school where there is not enough teacher and
people
to live uncomfortably. The government should be aware of and solve Use synonyms
this
problem. Linking Words
This
issue will be examined in the following essay.
Nowadays the amount of crime is increased by the most criminal come from Linking Words
a poor families
or do not get an Correct the article-noun agreement
poor families
a poor family
education
appropriately. The major cause of Use synonyms
this
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problemproblem
is inequality in society. Correct your spelling
problem problem
For example
, Linking Words
the
rich person will learn school that Correct article usage
a
it
is high-quality Correct pronoun usage
apply
due to
those Linking Words
must
spend a lot of money, Correct pronoun usage
who must
others
who do have not money enough will get unsuitable knowledge or don’t Correct word choice
while others
get
. Correct pronoun usage
itget
Moreover
, some indigent person has insufficient income make them need to steal something from other in order to live or, in the worst case, they may make violence to take Linking Words
a
stuff.
The government should realise and manage the Remove the article
apply
education
system and so on. Use synonyms
For instance
, add the system of learning onlineLinking Words
Change preposition
to
providing
learning equipment for children. Wrong verb form
provide
However
, there was resolved Linking Words
education
problem but the number of crimes rise because the police were not enough to catch the bad Use synonyms
people
. Use synonyms
Thus
, increasing the number of police, especially in dangerous areas makes Linking Words
people
feel too comfortable and reduced crime in communication.
In conclusion,Use synonyms
problem
close Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
as poverty and lack of educational opportunities can some Linking Words
people
to become criminals. In my opinion, should improve the Use synonyms
education
system so everyone Use synonyms
to learn
equally because everyone will have a work and be able to live independently by not stealing things from others,and adding strict rules for catching a thief.Change the verb form
learns
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