In order to reduce crime, we need to attack the cause of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities. It’s not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people into prison. Do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that crime happens every day in each countries cause

people

to live uncomfortably. The government should be aware of and solve

this

problem.

This

issue will be examined in the following essay. Nowadays the amount of crime is increased by the most criminal come from

a poor families

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poor families

a poor family

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or do not get an

education

appropriately. The major cause of

this

problemproblem

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problem problem

is inequality in society.

For example

,

the

Correct article usage

a

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rich person will learn school that

it

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apply

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is high-quality

due to

those

must

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who must

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spend a lot of money,

others

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while others

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who do have not money enough will get unsuitable knowledge or don’t

get

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itget

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.

Moreover

, some indigent person has insufficient income make them need to steal something from other in order to live or, in the worst case, they may make violence to take

a

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apply

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stuff. The government should realise and manage the

education

system and so on.

For instance

, add the system of learning online

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to

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the school where there is not enough teacher and

providing

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provide

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learning equipment for children.

However

, there was resolved

education

problem but the number of crimes rise because the police were not enough to catch the bad

people

.

Thus

, increasing the number of police, especially in dangerous areas makes

people

feel too comfortable and reduced crime in communication. In conclusion,

problem

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problems

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close

such

as poverty and lack of educational opportunities can some

people

to become criminals. In my opinion, should improve the

education

system so everyone

to learn

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learns

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equally because everyone will have a work and be able to live independently by not stealing things from others,and adding strict rules for catching a thief.