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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adilt. What is your opinion about this?

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Usually, a curfew is implemented if there exists a law and order situation in any particular area ranging different time durations,
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 or days or it might be imposed for any particular time based upon the government's instructions. In the US, teenagers are restricted to go out at certain times during the night unless an adult is accompanying them.
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 curfew situation is imposed in certain areas which involves violence, homeless people and drug addicts roaming around. There have been incidents in the past where the younger generation is at high risk and being targeted for stealing or even predators for sexual harassment. These moment restrictions are certainly implemented considering the safety of the teenagers
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, there might be situations where the teens need to go out
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 some emergencies or situations where the adults are not able to accompany the teens. In
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 ,case there should be a provision where the teens can request assistance from the imposing authority. In conclusion,
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 movement restrictions are certainly for the safety of the younger generation and
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 the law and order can be maintained
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