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The charts illustrate the participants in the olympics by gender and by totals

The charts illustrate the participants in the olympics by gender and by totals
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The bar
graph
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 compares the proportion of male and female Olympic participants , over a 90-year time period.
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 the line
graph
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 presents the total amount of
athletes
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 who participated in the
Olympics
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 from 1924 to 2014 . In general , both charts accounted for a dramatic increase in their rating ; where women who participated in the
Olympics
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 rose to 5000
last
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 year and the same trend can be seen on the line
graph
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 too . To be specific , 3000 men competed in the
Olympics
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 in 1924
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, for the opposite sex it was below a minority and the same trend was followed for the past 30 years which was 4500 for males
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 for females it was below 1000 .
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 , in 1984 participants for women reported a moderate increase in their rating , which made up approximately 2000
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 , for ,men it was a little above 5000. Surprisingly , women reported a significant climb in their participant ratio which was 5000 . Meanwhile,
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,males had 1000
athletes
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 compared to the opposite sex . The line
graph
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 shows that the total number of participants in the
Olympics
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 was considerably low in the initial year , with 4000
athletes
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 .
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, in 1954 it accounted for a moderate climb in their proportion which reached around 6000 . But , after 60 years the ratio of
athletes
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 in the
Olympics
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 has risen dramatically and reached a peak of 1000 in 2014 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, athletes, olympics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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