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People today can use internet to learn the life and culture of another country, so it cannot be necessary to travel to other country. To that extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recent advances in technology have made it possible for
people
 to learn about different
nations
' traditions,
history
, and lifestyles using the Internet which made certain
people
 doubt the necessity of travelling at all.
While
 it is true that nowadays there is a lot of
information
 available online, I believe that the
information
 available is not enough for a better understanding of the
history
 and culture of different
nations
.
Therefore
,visiting those countries are still necessary.
Firstly
, the
information
 available online often is very limited .
For example
, the
information
 available online often covers topics
such
 as
history
 the of a nation,
people
's traditions and national cuisine in general.
However
, there is very limited
information
 about the
people
 from different regions of the country, their local cuisine and their ways of living might differ from the ways of living of the
people
 from the other parts of the country.
For
this
 reason. It is important to
travel
, visit different parts of the country, stay with locals and learn from them.
Although
 it is
also
 true that the Internet made it possible to learn about other
nations
 without having to
travel
 with so much
information
 available online.
Moreover
, there are
travel
 programs available to watch, free of charge ,dedicated to travelling and experiencing different cultures of other
nations
.
However
, one can't experience other
people
's cultures effectively without spending time with those
people
 and learning directly from them.
To conclude
, the development of technology and the Internet made
information
 about other
nations
 accessible to everyone and some started to doubt the necessity of travelling at all. Despite having so much
information
 available, I am convinced that in order to fully understand the culture of other
people
 and learn about their
history
 and lifestyle it is necessary to physically experience it the virtual
travel
 and
information
 available online are not enough.
Submitted by  Niamh Gal on

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