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People today can use internet to learn the life and culture of another country, so it cannot be necessary to travel to other country. To that extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #internet #life #culture #country #travel
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Recent advances in technology have made it possible for
people
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 to learn about different
nations
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' traditions,
history
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, and lifestyles using the Internet which made certain
people
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 doubt the necessity of travelling at all.
While
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 it is true that nowadays there is a lot of
information
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 available online, I believe that the
information
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 available is not enough for a better understanding of the
history
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 and culture of different
nations
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.
Therefore
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,visiting those countries are still necessary.
Firstly
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, the
information
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 available online often is very limited .
For example
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, the
information
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 available online often covers topics
such
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 as
history
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 the of a nation,
people
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's traditions and national cuisine in general.
However
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, there is very limited
information
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 about the
people
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 from different regions of the country, their local cuisine and their ways of living might differ from the ways of living of the
people
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 from the other parts of the country.
For
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this
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 reason. It is important to
travel
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, visit different parts of the country, stay with locals and learn from them.
Although
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 it is
also
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 true that the Internet made it possible to learn about other
nations
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 without having to
travel
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 with so much
information
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 available online.
Moreover
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, there are
travel
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 programs available to watch, free of charge ,dedicated to travelling and experiencing different cultures of other
nations
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.
However
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, one can't experience other
people
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's cultures effectively without spending time with those
people
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 and learning directly from them.
To conclude
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, the development of technology and the Internet made
information
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 about other
nations
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 accessible to everyone and some started to doubt the necessity of travelling at all. Despite having so much
information
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 available, I am convinced that in order to fully understand the culture of other
people
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 and learn about their
history
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 and lifestyle it is necessary to physically experience it the virtual
travel
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 and
information
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 available online are not enough.
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