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The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

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The line graph compares how many stores were shut down and the number of shops that started launching in a nation over a 7-year period from 2011 to 2018. In the overview,
it is clear that
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 the proportions of the openings saw a dramatic decrease in 2018 and the closures fluctuated throughout the years.
Firstly
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, in 2011, the numbers of closures were around 6400 compared to 8500 openings. The marts that were shut down went up by 700 in the next two years
while
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 the launchings decreased dramatically and recovered by 4000 in 2014. In 2014, the points were nearly the same with 6100 and 6200 respectively with a slight difference of 100. After that, the number of shops that were closed reached a bottom of around 900 in 2015 and there was an upward trend in 2016 and finished at around 5200 in 2018.
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, the number of stores that were launched dropped to 4500 in 2015 and remained stable till 2017 with around 4100 and ended up at 3000 in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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