In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in

Nowadays, some
people
who have recently bought a
house
or building are curious about its past of its. It can be some reasons about some
people
would do anything to know about the past
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their building.
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essay will argue what causes
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people
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curious about the story of how their building is built and the story behind it. There are many reasons that someone wants to know the past of their building.
Such
as its
construction
. Some
people
want to know if it has good
construction
or not.
Thus
, many
people
believe if the building has a strong foundation in their
home
, it can make them feel safe from earthquakes or other disasters.
However
, if the
house
had bad
construction
,
then
the
house
is destroyed by earthquakes. So, it can make a disadvantage for the owner. They will spend more money to rebuild the
house
.
On the other hand
, some
people
want to know about the past of their
home
when they bought an old
house
. If the
house
is haunted, they want to know what was behind it: why is that
house
haunted?
Furthermore
, if they have a reason for that
home
, they have chances, whether they move to another
house
or stay in that
home
.
People
/who want to know something about the
construction
can ask with worker
constrution
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construction
who built it.
On the other hand
, some
people
tend to ask about
story
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of the
house
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their neighbours, it
more easy
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to ask them
due to
the near place from their
house
. Some neighbours
has
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lived in the area longer than other, so they have knowledge about what happened in the past,
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weather
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is there any accidents in that area.
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,
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others
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people
who just have moved into their
house
would search about the history
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the Internet, they can easily just type on their gadget.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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