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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart illustrates three different categories of
people
. Those who were born in Canada,
immigrants
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are immigrants
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 from English-speaking
countries
 and
immigrants
 from other
countries
. The chart compares the places visited by these types of
people
.
Overall
, it can be seen that all places had different fluctuations.
However
,
theatre
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the theatre
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 was the least
favourite
place
 among all groups of
people
.
To begin
, cinema was the
most
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favourite
place
 visited by a group of
people
 who were born in Canada,
whereas
theatre
 was the least
favourite
place
 visited by the same group.
In addition
,
library
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the library
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 and zoo had a fairly similar number of visitors by native
people
, slightly less and over 40%, respectively.
On the other hand
, similar to the native
people
 of Canada,
people
 from English-speaking
countries
 visited
cinema
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the cinema
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 mostly, which is more than 60%. What's more, except
theatre
 that had the least number of
people
 visited by
immigrants
 from English-speaking
countries
,
library
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the library
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 and zoo had 40 and 50 per cent number of visitors, respectively. In the case of the
immigrants
 from other
countries
,
library
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the library
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 was the most
favourite
 and
theatre
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the theatre
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 was the least
favourite
place
 visited.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, immigrants, countries, theatre, favourite, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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