The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are large differences in attendance by children in primary and secondary
schools
between industrialised and developing
countries
. Children in the least developed
countries
were significantly less likely to attend these
schools
than those in more developed and industrialised
countries
. The biggest differences came between secondary
school
enrollments for
girls
. Only 26% in the least-developed
countries
were enrolled in secondary
school
,
while
92% in industrialised
countries
were. Coming in somewhere between these two extremes, in other developing
countries
, 49% of
girls
were enrolled in secondary
schools
. The smallest difference in attendance was in primary
school
enrollments by
boys
. 71% of
boys
in the least developed
countries
, 88% of
boys
in other developing
countries
and 95% of
boys
in industrialised
countries
attended primary
school
. Enrollment by
girls
in primary
schools
was similar to these figures and enrollment by
boys
in secondary
schools
was similar to the figures for
girls
in secondary
schools
. Generally, those children living in the poorest
countries
seem to be least likely to attend primary and secondary
school
.
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