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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are large differences in attendance by children in primary and secondary
schools
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 between industrialised and developing
countries
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. Children in the least developed
countries
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 were significantly less likely to attend these
schools
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 than those in more developed and industrialised
countries
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. The biggest differences came between secondary
school
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 enrollments for
girls
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. Only 26% in the least-developed
countries
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 were enrolled in secondary
school
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,
while
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 92% in industrialised
countries
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 were. Coming in somewhere between these two extremes, in other developing
countries
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, 49% of
girls
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 were enrolled in secondary
schools
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. The smallest difference in attendance was in primary
school
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 enrollments by
boys
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. 71% of
boys
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 in the least developed
countries
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, 88% of
boys
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 in other developing
countries
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 and 95% of
boys
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 in industrialised
countries
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 attended primary
school
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. Enrollment by
girls
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 in primary
schools
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 was similar to these figures and enrollment by
boys
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 in secondary
schools
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 was similar to the figures for
girls
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 in secondary
schools
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. Generally, those children living in the poorest
countries
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 seem to be least likely to attend primary and secondary
school
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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