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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #study #science #food #time #subjects
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individuals tend to have
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 opinion that there should be involvement of culinary skills and
food
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science
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 in a school curriculum ,
while
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 many of them have
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the viewpoint
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 that scholars should be more focussed on
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most predominant
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 .In my opinion , there should be both
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the
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food
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science
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 and other vital
subjects
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 as a part of academics . To commence with , implementation of
science
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 of
food
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 and methods of its preparation should be there as
a important
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an important subject
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subjects
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 in the schools , because ,
food
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 is considered as basic and
formost
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foremost
 need to survive .
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, it is mandatory to have
a culinary skills
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culinary skills
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 and knowledge about
ingredients
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the ingredients
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 of each and every eatable thing .To elaborate,
mostly
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most
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childern
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children
 are living far away from their parents for quality education and in
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case
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 if they do not know how to prepare
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food
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food
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 ,how they would be able to live there
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Consequently
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 , they would prefer to have fast
food
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 which in turn
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causes
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 various health ailments to them
such
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 as obesity .
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 , if they would study
about
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the various components of
food
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 like vitamins, carbohydrates etcetera, it would help them to maintain a balanced diet in their daily routine
according to
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 the nutritional requirement of their bodies . To cite an example,
according to
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survey
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a survey
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 conducted by WHO, students pursuing
courses
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 related to diet are considered to be more healthy than other students of
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the same
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 age .
On the other hand
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other important
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 as well
instead
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 of
food
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 sciences on which
stuedents
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students
 should be more focussed . To explicate , these days
everthing
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everything
 is based on new technological methods , so it is a need
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time to explore
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IT
courses
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 to cope
up
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with
advancement
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the advancement
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 of
science
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 .
Furthermore
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, other
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 like medical sciences are equally important too,
due to
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 good wages and other perks ,more
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 to assist
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mankind to cure them
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 chronic disorders .
To conclude
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 , in my opinion , we can not neglect any of the aspects
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 both of them mentioned above .
Although
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 there
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variety
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a variety
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 of other
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 that are mandatory to earn money and dignity in society,
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everything starts
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healthy
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a healthy
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 body.
Therfore
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Therefore
,one should have knowledge about proper meals and
its
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 components as well . So , both
subjects
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 should go side by side .
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