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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #study #science #food #time #subjects
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individuals tend to have
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 opinion that there should be involvement of culinary skills and
food
science
 in a school curriculum ,
while
 many of them have
viewpoint
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the viewpoint
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 that scholars should be more focussed on
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most predominant
courses
 .In my opinion , there should be both
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the
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food
science
 and other vital
subjects
 as a part of academics . To commence with , implementation of
science
 of
food
 and methods of its preparation should be there as
a important
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an important subject
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subjects
 in the schools , because ,
food
 is considered as basic and
formost
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foremost
 need to survive .
Therefore
, it is mandatory to have
a culinary skills
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culinary skills
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 and knowledge about
ingredients
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the ingredients
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 of each and every eatable thing .To elaborate,
mostly
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most
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childern
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children
 are living far away from their parents for quality education and in
this
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 if they do not know how to prepare
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food
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food
 ,how they would be able to live there
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Consequently
 , they would prefer to have fast
food
 which in turn
cause
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causes
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 various health ailments to them
such
 as obesity .
Moreover
 , if they would study
about
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the various components of
food
 like vitamins, carbohydrates etcetera, it would help them to maintain a balanced diet in their daily routine
according to
 the nutritional requirement of their bodies . To cite an example,
according to
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a survey
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 conducted by WHO, students pursuing
courses
 related to diet are considered to be more healthy than other students of
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the same
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 age .
On the other hand
 , there are ample
of
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other important
courses
 as well
instead
 of
food
 sciences on which
stuedents
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students
 should be more focussed . To explicate , these days
everthing
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everything
 is based on new technological methods , so it is a need
of
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time to explore
the
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IT
courses
 to cope
up
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with
advancement
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 of
science
 .
Furthermore
, other
subjects
 like medical sciences are equally important too,
due to
 good wages and other perks ,more
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 to assist
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mankind to cure them
from
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 chronic disorders .
To conclude
 , in my opinion , we can not neglect any of the aspects
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 both of them mentioned above .
Although
 there
are
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variety
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a variety
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 of other
courses
 that are mandatory to earn money and dignity in society,
but
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everything starts
from
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healthy
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 body.
Therfore
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Therefore
,one should have knowledge about proper meals and
its
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 components as well . So , both
subjects
 should go side by side .
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