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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that high
school
students
 should be made to do some
work
 in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried
work
. There are several reasons why I would argue against
having
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compulsory community service for secondary
school
students
.
Firstly
, the
school
 curriculum is already full
with
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 important academic subjects,
such
 as maths, science and languages.
For example
, I remember having an extremely busy timetable when I was
at
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 high
school
, and it would not have been possible to add to it.
Secondly
,
students
' performance in other subjects would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity
work
 or neighbourhood improvement schemes.
Finally
, I believe that teenage
students
 would be reluctant to take part in any programme of obligatory
work
, and
this
 could lead to poor motivation and even bad behaviour. It is sometimes argued that high
school
students
 should be made to do some
work
 in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried
work
. In conclusion, I believe that a programme of obligatory charity or neighbourhood improvement
work
 should not be introduced in high schools
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