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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that high
school
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students
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 should be made to do some
work
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 in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried
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. There are several reasons why I would argue against
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compulsory community service for secondary
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students
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.
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, the
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 curriculum is already full
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 important academic subjects,
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 as maths, science and languages.
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, I remember having an extremely busy timetable when I was
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 high
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, and it would not have been possible to add to it.
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,
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' performance in other subjects would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity
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 or neighbourhood improvement schemes.
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, I believe that teenage
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 would be reluctant to take part in any programme of obligatory
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, and
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 could lead to poor motivation and even bad behaviour. It is sometimes argued that high
school
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students
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 should be made to do some
work
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 in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried
work
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. In conclusion, I believe that a programme of obligatory charity or neighbourhood improvement
work
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 should not be introduced in high schools
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